This is the beginning to my NaNoWriMoS project, and I would love to get your thoughts on it!
“Good morning, ma’am,” a girl’s young voice awoke Blanche. Blanche opened her eyes, confused, as this was a voice she didn’t recognize. “Who is that?” she asked. “Jolen, ma’am, I’m new to the house.” Blanche became frustrated, “Why didn’t anyone tell me I was getting a new girl?”
“I don’t know, ma’am. I only answered the notice a few days ago. I don’t know how long it was out.” Annoyed by this new upset, Blanche flung her sheets back off her body and put her feet on the floor.
“What’s your name, New Girl?”
“Jolen, like I said,” she answered as Blanche began walking towards her and stubbed her toe on something unexpected.
“What is this?!” Blanche screeched. “Is this the bench to my vanity?” “Yes, ma’am,” Jolen answered. “I’m cleaning your vanity right now.”
Blanche turned and took a few steps to the side until she felt the vanity table. She put her hands down on the top of the surface. She made frustrated noises, and then whirled around to Jolen, her jaw set. “Listen to me. I don’t know if anyone told you, but I cannot see. I see nothing. Therefore…”
“You’re blind?” Jolen interrupted. “That is the second time you have offended me with your cheek, young lady, and I will thank you to remain silent until you are told to speak. Therefore, as I was saying, the way that I have arranged my bedroom must not be disturbed. Just now,” she said, pointing to her foot, “I stubbed my toe because of your interference. If you clean my vanity, you will move things around and I will not be able to find anything!”
“I understand how it works, ma’am,” Jolen said softly, “my father was blind.” Blanche was caught short, but she quickly recovered and said haughtily, “Well, I’m not like that. Blind,” she said exaggeratedly. “I just cannot see.” She paused for a moment to ensure the distinction was clear, and then continued, “I trust you will rectify your error and henceforth leave my belongings in peace.” “Yes, ma’am,” Jolen said quickly. “Very well. Have you been in here long? Are there other things you’ve disturbed in here?” “No, ma’am.” Jolen answered.“Fine then.” Blanche said, “You’re excused,” and walked to the dressing screen, turning her back on Jolen.
Any thoughts, readers? Intrigued? Bored?